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The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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THe
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The
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 presented bar chart compares data about the growth in the population who lived in 5 metropolises;
moreover
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, the communities distribution in urban and rural regions.
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, it is crucial that the number of people
whowere
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who were
 living in all districts increased in the period of 40 years;
additionally
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, in the first years
Tokyo
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 had
a
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large
inhabitants
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number of inhabitants
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, but in
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last
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the last
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 year
Tokyo
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 and Bombay had the same level.
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According
 to the plot,
Tokyo
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,
that
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which
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 was the main city which had a massive society, at the beginning had 16;
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 the trend climbed
sighnificantlly
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significantly
 to 27 in 2010. The second area was New
Yourk
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York
, having a slight rise motivation, because in 1970, had a 14;
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, in 2010, reached 17. At the
start
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 Shanghai, The third one, had 12 after that,
jumbed
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jumped
 to 21 in 2010. The graph demonstrates Bambay in 1970, was in
fourth
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the fourth
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 level by 5;
nevertheless
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,
it
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 direction went up
overwhelmongly
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overwhelmingly
 to roughly the same as
Tokyo
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 in the
last
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 year. Jakarta, which had 2 in 1970, grew enormously and touched
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19 in 2010
taht
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which
 was higher than
Second
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 area.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tokyo with synonyms.
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