Environmental problems are too big for individuals countries and individual persons to address. In other words, we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. What is your opinion?

Global warming turbulence has been enhanced significantly at
world wide
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level.So,it has
became
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extremely detrimental to solve it at an individual level.For
this
,some people argue that it will be only possible at a global level.I believe in
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statement and discuss it in
this
essay. Humans are the only
who
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ones who
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are responsible for the damage
of
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to
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the environment.
Due to
industrialisation,too much air pollution
taken
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place
as a result
noxious gases are emitted
in
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the air.These gases have proved to be detrimental
for
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the erosion of an
ozon
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ozone
layer
that is
helpful for the protection from UV rays.
Furthermore
,nowadays temperatures are at
its
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their
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peak because of numerous
deforestations
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deforestation
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.To solve
this
,
individual
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individuals
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should take
part
in
this
process of
spread
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awareness and
act
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acting
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as a responsible human towards
nature
. It is spreading globally,
however
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from
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my opinion,it is
a
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responsibility
of every human to serve
nature
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as
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its respective
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respective
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appropriate
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way.
Moreover
,
protection
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the protection
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of
nature
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natural
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resources
have
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became
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become
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crucial
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part
of human
being
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beings
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.
While
doing anything for their growth,
nature
has been considered
as
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central
part
of the process rather than avoiding it.
Otherwise
, it has anticipated that it will become difficult to survive on the mother earth.
For example
,it is an individual's
responsibility
to plant
tree
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a tree
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on special
occasion
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occasions
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rather than spending much on materialistic
thing
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things
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.
To sum up
this
,I
retierate
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reiterate
reiterated
that
person
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a person
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is a
part
of society so,
this
is his
responsibility
to protect
surroundings
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his surroundings
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rather than act as an irresponsible individual.Taking some
responsibility
for nurturing
always
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been beneficial not only for individual growth but
also
inspiration
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to their offspring.
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coherence cohesion
Your ideas need to be organized logically. For example, ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
task achievement
Your sentences are often unclear and difficult to follow. Focus on writing clear and concise sentences. Avoid repetition and use varied sentence structures to maintain the reader's interest.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points. While you have made some general claims, more concrete examples would make your argument stronger and more persuasive.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction clearly states your opinion and sets the stage for your argument.
supported main points
You make reasonable points about the responsibility of individuals in protecting the environment.

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