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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of passengers that arrive at three airports(
John
F
.
Kennedy
,
LaGuardia
 and Newark) over the period of 6 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Laguardia
 Airport had the most visitors throughout the period. but in 2000, it experienced the highest influx of travellers
while
 the numbers for
John
F
.
Kennedy
 declined consistently over the years. In 1995, the
Laguardia
 had close to 35
million
 visitors
whereas
John
F
.
Kennedy
 remained in the second spot, slightly lower than 15
million
. Between the years 1996 and 1997, the arrival of passengers declined considerably in
LaGuardia
while
John
F
.
Kennedy
 overtook by a margin of nearly 15
million
 individuals, after that, the figure for
John
F
.
Kennedy
 fell drastically till 1999 to 50
million
. By 1999, the visitors of
LaGuardia
 rose dramatically, reaching its highest at nearly 65
million
 in 2000. The Newark airport had a significantly lower number of passengers travelling compared to
it's
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its
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 counterparts.
By contrast
, it had up to 15
million
 in 1995, close to 25
million
 in 1996 and the highest in 1999 at above 40
million
.
Furthermore
, it overtook
John
F
.
Kennedy
 by a range of nearly 10
million
 people.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words john, f, kennedy, laguardia, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
  • followed by
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