The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of passengers that arrive at three airports(

John

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Kennedy

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LaGuardia

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and Newark) over the period of 6 years.

Overall

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it is clear that

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Laguardia

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Airport had the most visitors throughout the period. but in 2000, it experienced the highest influx of travellers

while

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the numbers for

John

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Kennedy

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declined consistently over the years. In 1995, the

Laguardia

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had close to 35

million

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visitors

whereas

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John

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Kennedy

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remained in the second spot, slightly lower than 15

million

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. Between the years 1996 and 1997, the arrival of passengers declined considerably in

LaGuardia

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while

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John

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Kennedy

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overtook by a margin of nearly 15

million

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individuals, after that, the figure for

John

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Kennedy

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fell drastically till 1999 to 50

million

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. By 1999, the visitors of

LaGuardia

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rose dramatically, reaching its highest at nearly 65

million

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in 2000. The Newark airport had a significantly lower number of passengers travelling compared to

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counterparts.

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, it had up to 15

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in 1995, close to 25

million

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in 1996 and the highest in 1999 at above 40

million

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Furthermore

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, it overtook

John

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Kennedy

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by a range of nearly 10

million

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people.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words john, f, kennedy, laguardia, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

197 words

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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

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