The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line graph displays information on the
amount
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number
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of people
participated
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who participated
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for
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in
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different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the
years
2000 to 2020. From an
overall
perspective, it is evident that
Film
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the Film
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club had the highest number of
participants
over the entire time period. Musical performances and Table tennis increased significantly,
while
Amateur dramatics decreased sharply. In 2000,
Film
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the Film
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club was the highest activity with
the
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a
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number of
participants
of just under 65 and it fluctuated between nearly 65 and 60 in the next 20
years
. Amateur dramatics had just above 25
participants
and it increased gradually to approximately 30 before it sharply decreased to nearly 5 in 2020. Martial arts hovered between just under 40 and around 30 from 2000 to 2020. Musical performances had no
participants
for the first 5
years
,
however
, it increased dramatically to just below 20 in 2020. Table tennis had the lowest number of nearly 16 and it slightly increased to 20 in 2005 and remained stable for the next 5
years
before it significantly increased to just above 50 and became the second highest activity in 2020.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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