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The chart below shows the profit of resale markets sold over a period of ten years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the profit of resale markets sold over a period of ten years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about clothing item numbers which were sold in
second hand
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second-hand
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 stores in the period from 2017 to 2027. The period
contains
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is
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 ten years.
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Overall
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The overall
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 trend of
this
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 layout
upward
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is upward
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. In 2017 resale markets had a profit
in
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of
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 20
billions
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billion
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 dollars. Until 2019 benefit of flea stores increased and reached 28
billions
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billion
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 dollars. In 2020 income of
thrifts
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thrift
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 stores went down
for
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by
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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one billion compared with the previous year.
However
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, it kept going up in other years.
This
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 trend slightly increased until 2027 and will reach 70
millions
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million
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of
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in
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 profit.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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