The bar chart below describes some changes in the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural, and towns between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes in the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural, and towns between 1995 and 2010.
The provided bar charts delineate the fluctuations in the percentages of native-born Australians and foreign-born individuals residing in urban, rural, and town areas between 1995 and 2010.
Initially
, urban
residents
constituted the largest demographic across all regions during both years under consideration.
Moreover
,
while
the urban populace witnessed a notable increase, the proportions of inhabitants in towns and rural regions experienced considerable declines. In 1995, Australian urban inhabitants represented a significant proportion compared to their counterparts in other regions, comprising approximately half of the total,
whereas
non-
residents
accounted for less than 10%.
This
disparity was mirrored in rural areas, where native Australians constituted 30% of the population,
while
foreign-born
residents
comprised 40%.
Conversely
, town
residents
were the least populous group within Australia, constituting merely one-fifth of the total. Over the subsequent 15-year period, there was a discernible upward trajectory in the proportion of urban dwellers in Australia, with an increase of 10%, which was half the rate observed among foreign
residents
.
However
, both town and rural populations within Australia experienced a contrary trend, each declining by approximately 17%. Notably, rural inhabitants from other countries faced a significant distributional disparity, comprising only 3% of the total population.
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