The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

» You should write at least 150 words.
The bar graph shows the
number
of imprisonment in five
countries
-
Britain
,
Australia
, New
Zealand
, the US and
Canada
, between 1930 and 1980.
Overall
,
Canada
had the highest
number
of
prisoners
in 1930
while
Great
Britain
had the least. But after 50 years, the figure for incarceration decreased in
Canada
and the United States had the highest
number
of
prisoners
.
Initially
, in 1930,
Canada
had 120
thousand
prisoners
and that was the highest
number
of inmates among the five
countries
. There were 100
thousand
prisoners
both in the US and New
Zealand
. Again,
Australia
had around 70
thousand
prisoners
and Great
Britain
had only 30
thousand
prisoners
and that was the lowest. After a decade, the
prisoners
number
in
Britain
remained almost the same
while
the
number
decreased in
Australia
, New
Zealand
and
Canada
. But
this
year the total
number
of
prisoners
increased in the US by 30
thousand
and reached 130
thousand
. In 1950, the
prisoners
number
increased in
Britain
and slightly decreased in
Australia
and New
Zealand
.
On the other hand
, the
prisoner
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in
Canada
increased and got highest among the five
countries
and decreased in the US. A similar trend in terms of prisoner numbers in these
countries
could be observed after a decade.
Finally
, in 1980, the
prisoners
number
in these
countries
increased except in
Australia
. The US had the highest
number
of
prisoners
this
year and Great
Britain
,
Canada
and New
Zealand
had more than 80
thousand
prisoners
this
year.
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