The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. »
The bar graph shows the
number
of imprisonment in five Use synonyms
countries
- Use synonyms
Britain
, Use synonyms
Australia
, New Use synonyms
Zealand
, the US and Use synonyms
Canada
, between 1930 and 1980.Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
Canada
had the highest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
prisoners
in 1930 Use synonyms
while
Great Linking Words
Britain
had the least. But after 50 years, the figure for incarceration decreased in Use synonyms
Canada
and the United States had the highest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
prisoners
.
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Initially
, in 1930, Linking Words
Canada
had 120 Use synonyms
thousand
Use synonyms
prisoners
and that was the highest Use synonyms
number
of inmates among the five Use synonyms
countries
. There were 100 Use synonyms
thousand
Use synonyms
prisoners
both in the US and New Use synonyms
Zealand
. Again, Use synonyms
Australia
had around 70 Use synonyms
thousand
Use synonyms
prisoners
and Great Use synonyms
Britain
had only 30 Use synonyms
thousand
Use synonyms
prisoners
and that was the lowest. After a decade, the Use synonyms
prisoners
’ Use synonyms
number
in Use synonyms
Britain
remained almost the same Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
number
decreased in Use synonyms
Australia
, New Use synonyms
Zealand
and Use synonyms
Canada
. But Use synonyms
this
year the total Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
prisoners
increased in the US by 30 Use synonyms
thousand
and reached 130 Use synonyms
thousand
.
In 1950, the Use synonyms
prisoners
’ Use synonyms
number
increased in Use synonyms
Britain
and slightly decreased in Use synonyms
Australia
and New Use synonyms
Zealand
. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, the Linking Words
prisoner
in Fix the agreement mistake
number of prisoners
Canada
increased and got highest among the five Use synonyms
countries
and decreased in the US. A similar trend in terms of prisoner numbers in these Use synonyms
countries
could be observed after a decade. Use synonyms
Finally
, in 1980, the Linking Words
prisoners
’ Use synonyms
number
in these Use synonyms
countries
increased except in Use synonyms
Australia
. The US had the highest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
prisoners
Use synonyms
this
year and Great Linking Words
Britain
, Use synonyms
Canada
and New Use synonyms
Zealand
had more than 80 Use synonyms
thousand
Use synonyms
prisoners
Use synonyms
this
year.Linking Words
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