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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. k

The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. k
#show #waste #products #three #countries #summerise #information #features #comparisons #k
The given demonstrated illustrations compare
a
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apply
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data
of
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on
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 eliminating hazardous waste in three countries shown.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 in all situations
incineration
 has
totally
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total
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 possession of the rank in two of
threes
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three
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,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 a minority amount of sorting waste was shown by the United Kingdom only. Turning to the details, for the Republic of Korea a majority
part is
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consisted
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consists
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from
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of
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recycling
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the recycling
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 process
by
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69%,
then
 next is undergrounding way with 22%, and the least one is
incineration
with
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at
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 9%.
Following
this
, for Sweden there were vice versa, an enormous portion possessed by underground methods with 55%, recycling and
incineration
 with 25% and 20% respectively.
United
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The United
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 Kingdom
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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similar
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similarly
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similar
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 numbers as
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the two
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two
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the two
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 countries, actually with
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marginal
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marginally
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marginal
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 differences,
such
 as undergrounding by 82%,
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and a
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a
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and a
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little bit of
incineration
 by 2%. At the same time in the United
Kingdom
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Kingdom,
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 there
are
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is
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 another kind of waste conduction.
For instance
, chemical treatment and dumping at sea
by
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the data about 8% for each one.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incineration with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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