The graph shows the number of students enrolled in 4 different courses in China from 2008 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information.

The graph shows the number of students enrolled in 4 different courses in China from 2008 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information.
Firstly
, today I'm going to summarize the information in the graph above starting with comparing the overseas student's numbers to the local student's numbers in China, From what we can see back in 2001
it
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was the lowest year of all the other years for overseas
students
and
then
we have a sudden jump in 2002.
Hence
, I'm talking about the overseas
students
the same exact thing goes to the local
students
when you just take a quick glance but when you really take care and look closely you can notice that they are way higher than the overseas
students
and no way in the near future the overseas
students
are going to be higher than the local
students
.
Lastly
, all we need to make sure that the theory is working and testing the given numbers that we have I did that and I would gladly inform you that overseas
students
are not close to surpassing the local
students
at all.
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  • enrollment
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • significant
  • moderate
  • dramatic
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady
  • sharp
  • notable
  • data
  • analysis
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