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You use public trasnport and have been facing issues. Write a letter to the public transport autoroties. In your letter include: why public transport is important to you what problem you face suggest what can be done to improve public transport

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about the problems which I have to face
while
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 using public transport. I used to travel by bus on
regular
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a regular
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 basis, as I do not have my own car, so public transport is really important for me for going
to
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apply
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anywhere. I would like to remind you about the problems which I
faced
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face
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 nowadays
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 using public transport.
Firstly
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, sometimes the bus route is cancelled
thats
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that
 why I have to take
next
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the next
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 bus
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due
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and due
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 to the cancellation I am unable to reach at work on exact time.
Secondly
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, the
arrivals time
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arrival times
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 of buses
show
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shown
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 on the transit app and the actual time of arrival
is
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are
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 different. So I am facing
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 kind of
problems
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problem
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. I would like to suggest you the cancellation of routes must be informed around half an hour before
ans
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and
 the timing of
transit
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the transit
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 app should be corrected. I hope you have a prompt solution
about
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to
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this
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 problem. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, Parwinder Kaur.
Submitted by parwinderk7878 on

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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single idea to improve clarity.
complete response
Provide more specific examples or details about the problems faced to strengthen the task response.
greeting and closing
Strong greeting and closing to the letter.
logical structure
Logical structure is generally clear and easy to follow.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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