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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
This
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 Line chart depicts the
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 levels of the main
typs
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types
 of
the
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apply
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fuel in the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 from 1981 to 2000. It is clear from the graph that, the Petroleum
, Natural
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and natural
gas
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 have approximately the same pattern and we can see the Coal
prepartion
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preparation
 shows a
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 rate during
this
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 time.
According to
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 what is shown, In 1981 there
have
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were
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 40
tonnes
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for
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of
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 petroleum and around 85 for Natural
gas
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 after that petroleum
has
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a
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apply
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rapid
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 grew with 140 after two
years
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then
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 it
has being
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flactuated untill
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fluctuated until
 2000
tonnes
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.
Moreover
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, Natural
gas
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 remained steady from 1981 to 1991
at
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the same year the making of it
has
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had
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 a major
decreased
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 with 100
tonnes
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at
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in
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 2000.
In
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On
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 the
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otherwise
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other hand
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, Coal productivity
start
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started
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with
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at
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 80
tonnes
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at
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in
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 1981
whereas
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at
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after 3
years
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 has a massive
declined
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decline
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 within
a
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half
amount
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the amount
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 that it
has
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had
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 previously after that it
has
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apply
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a
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apply
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slightly grew
with
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to
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 20
tonnes
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also
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,
at
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in
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 the next
years
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 it
has
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apply
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a
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gradually
dropping
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dropped
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with
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to
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 about 38
tonnes
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 at 2000.
To sum up
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 we could say that, ptroleum
, Natural
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and natural
gas
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 have the most productive
at
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in
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 these
years
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 in
contras
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contrast
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with
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to
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 Coal
making
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apply
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it is remained
about
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at about
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with
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apply
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the same
rated start
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rate starting
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 flactuated and levelled at
last
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years
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year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, tonnes, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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