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task response
Your essay would greatly benefit from a clear central thesis statement or argument in your introduction to provide direction for your readers.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs require more structure. Make sure each paragraph discusses one main idea clearly explained and supported by relevant examples or evidence.
task response
Avoid repetition and focus on expanding your points with relevant examples to better support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Try to work on transitions between your ideas. Use linking words or phrases to connect your thoughts logically.
task response
The introduction attempts to address the issue, specifying the problem regarding caring for the elderly.
task response
You provide recommendations on how to improve the situation for those caring for the elderly.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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