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Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter: explain why you have gone to live in the new city describe the place where you are living invite your friend to come and see you Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

#friend #city #place #addresses
Hello, my dear friend. I hope you are doing well. I don't remember if I told you that we had
planed
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planned
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 to move to the new place. Now we are living in another country already 5
monthes
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months
. All of our family had moved, including our 4 cats. The place, we are living, is a small, pretty, and very green town. We have
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a wonderfull
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wonderfull
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wonderful
 3 bedroom townhouse - 2 floors and the basement. We developed the basement to be our home office.
Moreover
, we have the backyard, that was abandoned by the previous tenants, but I'm trying
do
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to
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 grow something there. Not far from our house - 5 minutes by car or 30 minutes by foot is an amazing public park with plenty of flowers,
waterfall
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a waterfall
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,
pond
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a pond
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 with
geezes
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geezers
, etc. In the winter they
are making here
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make
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 a skating track
.
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here.
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Furthermore
, there are a lot of city events in
this
 park, the
last
 one we participated next was The RibFest, with many tasty food and beautiful music of 70-th. I am very
exaiting
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exciting
exiting
 to invite you to visit me in my new home. Maybe it'll be suitable
to
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for
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 you to spend your next vacation with us. Best regards, Anastassia
Submitted by anastasia on

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task achievement
Be mindful of some spelling and grammatical errors: 'monthes' should be 'months', 'wonderfull' should be 'wonderful', 'geezes' should be 'geese', 'exaiting' should be 'excited'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs are clear and logically structured. Some sentences could be better organized for easier reading. For instance, you could separate the description of the town from the description of your activities to make it clearer.
task achievement
You have provided a complete response to the task by explaining why you moved, describing your new place, and inviting your friend.
task achievement
The tone of your writing is very friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You used linking words and phrases effectively to connect ideas (e.g., 'moreover', 'furthermore').
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