Nowadays, many people are likely to over use internet and some of them even become addicted to it. What are reason for this? What problem can be cause by internet over use?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Endless source of information
  • Disconnect
  • Capture and retain users' attention
  • Excessive usage
  • Immersive and competitive nature
  • Prolonged periods of play
  • Real-world activities
  • Remote work
  • Blur the lines
  • Mental health issues
  • Anxiety
  • Depression
  • Social isolation
  • Neglect
  • Screen time
  • Lack of physical activity
  • Eye strain
  • Poor posture
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Procrastinate
  • Distracted easily
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