the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
This
line graph indicates that
the visitor numbers who were staying on Correct word choice
apply
cruise
ships, or staying on Caribbean
Add an article
the Caribbean
island
from 2010 to 2017. Fix the agreement mistake
islands
Overall
, the total number of tourists gradually increased throughout the whole period shown. While
visitors staying on island
consistently went up by the end of Correct article usage
the island
year
, Add an article
the year
cruise
users showed a slow pattern and it had lower
visitors than Correct word choice
fewer
travelers
on Change the spelling
travellers
island
.
In 2010, travellers who were lodging in Correct article usage
the island
Caribbean
started from 0.25 Correct article usage
the Caribbean
million
and it
reached 1 Correct pronoun usage
apply
million
, which were
almost double compared to the previous Correct subject-verb agreement
was
year
. The cruise
ship users started from 0.75 million
in the first year
in 2010 but had no changes next year
in 2011.
It is noticeable that the tourists
on Correct quantifier usage
number of tourists
island
dropped by half again from 2011 to 2012, Add an article
the island
whereas
the cruise
ship visitors went up gradually between 2011 and 2013. Correct quantifier usage
number of cruise
However
, from the year
of 2013, the island
tourists started increasing again and it soared sharply and reached Correct quantifier usage
number of island
at
2 Change preposition
apply
million
in 2017. In contrast
, there were no changes in visitor numbers of cruise
ships from 2013 to 2015 and it decreased slightly to 1.25 million
in 2016. However
, it recovered again to 1.5 million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cruise, island, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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