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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task: The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task: The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The Line diagram shows the
production
level
 of the natural resources of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
, the line diagram shows the three main
production
level
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levels
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 of the natural resources the three types
are
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apply
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,
Petroleum
, Coal and Natural gas are used in the years between 1981 and 2000. In the year 1981, the
production
level
 of
petroleum
 was getting started to increase in the energy units. At, the time of 1984 the
use
 of
petroleum
 was at
the
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its
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 peak
of
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apply
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use
 during that period the usage of coal
was
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gratually
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gradually
decraced
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decreased
decorated
beasuce
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because
 the
high
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high-level
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level
production
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of production
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 of
petroleum
. Suddenly, the
petroleum
prduction
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production
 was reduced in the year 1990. After that, it was increased in 2000.
The coal
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Coal
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production
 was
continuesly
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continuously
 reduced because high
use
 of petrol. Natural gas usage was very low
in
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at
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 the beginning of 1981 after words the
use
 and
production
 of natural gas
was
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apply
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started to increase constantly and it reached
the
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its
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 peak
at
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in
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 early 2000.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, level, petroleum, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fuel production
  • Trend
  • Steady
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant
  • Milestones
  • Turning point
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Evolve
  • Notable
  • Summarize
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