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Some people believe that purchasing imported agricultural products has a positive effect. Others think consuming domestic products is better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today’s interconnected world,
the
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trading has
bacome
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become
 so common that we can easily find a variety of imported agricultural
products
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at
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 supermarkets. With the prevalence of
products
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 overseas, whether purchasing
products
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 from other countries should be encouraged or not has been a contentious issue among various stakeholders. To comprehensively address two perspectives, it is essential to delve deeply into each
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 and their supports. On the one hand, several individuals have expressed concern about the high probability of
the
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 sharply decreasing portion of
the
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domestic produce if imported
products
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 aggressively are distributed in the country. They assert that
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 phenomenon would contribute to
erosion
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the erosion
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 of domestic economic growth in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector
leathly
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.
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, France has been struggling with challenges that the competitiveness of their national farm
procue
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produce
, including tomatoes and apples, has been constantly declined after the assertive policies of
embarcing
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embracing
embarking
products
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 from other European countries.
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produces
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 against the country’s economy.
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, a significant number of cohorts for consuming imported agricultural
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 believe that shoppers can choose a range of
products
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 when shopping. The diversity of ingredients provides the opportunity the experience exotic
produces
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, leading to widening the
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 culinary experience. In fact, Bananas and Pineapples, beloved by Korean people, exemplify
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 case. Koreans are able to enjoy
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tropical fruits, which cannot be grown because of the climate, thanks to
internatinal
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international
 trade and import.
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 shows that imported agricultural
products
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 offer wider
choises
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choices
choice
 for consumers. In conclusion,
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 both perspectives hold merits, my preference leans towards the benefits of imported agricultural
products
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.
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 is because it allows us to enjoy
more
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 diverse range of food and offers the chance to experience unique and special
produces
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products
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.

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grammar
Work on reducing grammatical errors and improving sentence structure for clearer expression. Pay particular attention to subject-verb agreement, proper use of articles, and plural forms. This will help enhance readability and clarity.
content
Expand on the discussion by adding more detailed examples and explanations for each viewpoint. This will provide a more balanced and nuanced argument, thereby strengthening your position.
structure
Although your ideas are generally coherent, working on smoother transitions between paragraphs and clearer topic sentences will create a more logically connected essay.
content
You’ve addressed both perspectives on the topic and provided relevant examples to support each side. This shows a thorough understanding of the issue.
structure
The introduction and conclusion provide a clear framework for your essay, setting up and summarizing the discussion effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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