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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
#expenditure #two #countries #consumer #goods
The given graph provides information about how much money was wasted in two European countries
in
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 various goods in the year
of
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2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 more and more British people spend their fortune on cars , books
as well as
 cameras,
although
 the French people pay attention to computers and perfumes.
To begin
 with, the expenses of the cars in
the
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Great Britain made up the highest contribution rather than other trends .
Moreover
, individuals who lived in the UK were spending their money not only
cameras
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 but
also
books
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on books
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 at nearly 35000 € and 45000€ respectively in 2010.
On the contrary
 , the perfume
productions
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production
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 in France was bigger than that of
UK
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the UK
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 by 60000
pound
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pounds
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 in 2010.
Nevertheless
, wasting more wealth reached a peak among French humans ,
while
this
 trend was lower than
Britain
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Britain's
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 approximately 50000
pound
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pounds
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 in 2010
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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