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The maps show the changes in Felixstone in the UK between 1967 and 2001

The maps show the changes in Felixstone in the UK between 1967 and 2001
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The pictures display the development of
the
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Felixstone
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Felixstowe
 town in the United Kingdom from 1967 to 2001.
Overall
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, there were significant transformations in
this
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 area over the period and in a modernization tendency that made it more suitable for service and tourism, and most of the changes were done with the region on the right,
while
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 it witnessed only a few
development
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 to the left side. Looking at the upper zone of the map in 1967 and 2001,
it is clear that
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 there was no change to the
North
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Northwest
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west
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 side, from the High street to the left, a Golf course and the five shops still remained unchanged in
this
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 area after the period.
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, there were many changes to the North East side, where all the shops were removed and replaced with apartments
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 the farmland was demolished and it saw the appearance of a tourism complex with
hotel
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a hotel
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, swimming pool and tennis courts. The lower part of the town experienced some new additions to the
south
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southwest
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west
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 of the city
as well as
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 several transformations to the
south
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southwest
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west
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 during the timeframe. People constructed some wind turbines between the sea and the Dunes
on
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in
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 the
south
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southwest
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west
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, and a car park was established next to the hotel and the Cafe. All the marina and pier
as well as
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fish
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the fish
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 market in the
south east
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south-east
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 were demolished and a private beach was formed opposite the complex of
hotel
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the hotel
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, swimming pool and tennis courts
while
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 a public beach was established between the sea and the cafe.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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