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The table below gives average yearly statistics of four cities.

The table below gives average yearly statistics of four cities.
The table provides average yearly statistics for
Edinburgh
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,
Paris
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,
Helsinki
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, and
Casablanca
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, highlighting total annual
rainfall
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, number of wet days, annual
snowfall
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, temperature range, and hours of sunlight per day.
Overall
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,
Casablanca
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 stands out for its minimal precipitation and highest average sunlight,
while
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Helsinki
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 experiences the coldest temperatures and the most
snowfall
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.
Paris
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 has the highest annual
rainfall
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.
Edinburgh
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 displays moderate statistics in all categories.
Paris
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 receives
highest
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 annual
rainfall
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 at 700
mm
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, closely followed by
Edinburgh
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 with 550
mm
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.
Helsinki
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 has
lower
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a lower
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 total at 500
mm
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,
while
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Casablanca
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 experiences significantly less
rainfall
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, only 25
mm
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 annually. Despite the high
rainfall
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,
Paris
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 has the fewest wet days (78) compared to
Edinburgh
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 (150) and
Helsinki
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 (181).
Casablanca
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, with minimal
rainfall
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, has just 5 wet days.In terms of
snowfall
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,
Helsinki
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 stands out with 450
mm
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 per year which is substantially higher than
Edinburgh
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's 75
mm
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 and
Paris
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's 10
mm
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.
Casablanca
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 records no
snowfall
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. Temperature ranges vary widely:
Helsinki
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 experiences the coldest temperatures (-10 to 18 degrees Celsius), and
Casablanca
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 has the broadest range of 9-35 degrees Celsius.Regarding sunlight,
Casablanca
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 enjoys the most with 9 hours per day,
while
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Edinburgh
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get
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 the least with 4 hours per day.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words edinburgh, paris, helsinki, casablanca, rainfall, snowfall, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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