A friend is expecting you to stay with him in ten days, but unfortunately you forgot that you have a business trip at the same time. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: apologise and say that you cannot come to visit explain why you will not be able to visit suggest another time that you could visit.

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Dear friend Before, I want to say I am

thankfull

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thankful

for your invitation. Unfortunately, I

have

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appologise

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apologise

, cause

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I couldn't receive

the

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your kindly

expectaion

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expectation

expectations

. In that fact, I

have

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got a critical phone call from our business colleague

last

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night. You

are knowing

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me, that I have

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a registetered

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registetered

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registered

waitlist for

business

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trip to the US with new

co partners

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. My partner made something to

accelereate

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accelerate

our meeting in NY next week. I

actulay

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actually

planned the trip about in April. But my

co worker

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wants to go immediately. Of

course

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that business trip is

extremly

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extremely

important for me. I am very sorry,

for

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but

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I will not stay in your home with your family. So I hope we can visit

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the

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your winter house in November

this

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year. We will enjoy

when

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I back to your country next winter. Thank you , my bestie.

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single idea per paragraph

Work on ensuring that paragraphs cover a single idea each. This makes your writing more organized and easier to follow.

general grammar vocabulary

Review your writing for grammatical errors and ensure the use of appropriate vocabulary.

complete response

The letter covers all the required points: an apology, an explanation, and a suggestion for another time.

suitable writing tone

Your tone is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

145 words

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