The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

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A glance at the two pie charts provided reveals the relative

popularity

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of various leisure

activities

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among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Of these

activities

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, watching TV was the most widely enjoyed in both years, at 32

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in 1985 and a slightly lower 30

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in 1995. Yet, by far the most significant change to take place during

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period was the increased

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of computer games. Not a single respondent to the survey rated playing computer games as their preferred leisure activity in 1985.

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, by 1995

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figure stood at 27

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– the second highest

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more popular in 1995 was talking with friends, at 26

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compared to 21

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a decade earlier. In stark contrast,

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, all other

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decreased in

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. Eating out – which was the second most widely enjoyed pastime in 1985, accounting

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of respondents – slipped to a mere 8

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in 1995.

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, there were

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considerable decreases in the

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ratings of talking with family, other

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and (as previously mentioned) watching television.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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180 words

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significant increase/decrease
steadily rise/drop
surge in popularity
decline/fall in interest
relative popularity
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social changes
shift in preferences
popularity surge
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decade comparison
survey results
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entertainment sector
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The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Do the advantages of using computers for learning outweigh its advantages?

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