Some people say that the extened family is not as important as it once was. Others think that its worth has not changed because people always need help from their family members. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some
people
argued
that Wrong verb form
argue
extened
family is not Correct your spelling
extended
fundamental
as it once was in Rephrase
as fundamental
previouse
Correct your spelling
previous
days
.Others think that its worth has not avoid
taking place the reason human need or seak of Change the verb form
avoided
healp
every time from their family Correct your spelling
help
mumbers
.
Correct your spelling
members
To begin
with,first of all, nowadays,people
dont
bother to extend their family Correct your spelling
don't
due to
modern trend
. Fix the agreement mistake
trends
However
they think extending family will have more Add a comma
However,
resposibilties
.Correct your spelling
responsibilities
Moreover
, taking care of new born
Correct your spelling
newborns
its
Correct your spelling
is
major
responsibility and Correct article usage
a major
its
very Correct your spelling
it is
axorbitant
in current Correct your spelling
important
days
.Such
as,new born required
milk to Wrong verb form
requires
drink
every 2 hours if the mother cant breastfeed for some personal issues Add a missing verb
be drink
then
need
to buy the milk from Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
pharmacy
or grocery and its very expensive Correct article usage
a pharmacy
comparing
to Wrong verb form
compared
thje
old Correct your spelling
the
days
.On the other hand
,
some people
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
dont
have Correct your spelling
don't
ability
to make children neither male Change the article
the ability
or
female.There was research regarding Replace the word
nor
this
,that in almost all countries there are issues regarding both genders cant
make babies,and some problems from men and some from women.
Next,there are some Correct your spelling
can't
people
are
satisfied and agree to extend their Correct pronoun usage
who are
blood line
,where they think Correct your spelling
bloodline
its
important to have Replace the word
it's
it is
huge
family, and Correct article usage
a huge
its
common in some countries.Replace the word
it's
it is
Furthermore
, mentality
of some Add an article
the mentality
people
that
he or she wants to see her or Add a missing verb
is that
hes
grandchildren.Correct your spelling
his
her
Whereas
, if there is big business or wealthy families wants to have their money and business for their grand grand children
for their goof life and future.Correct your spelling
grandchildren
For instance
,in
these Change preposition
apply
days
to live is very expensive specially in educations
fees,Change the noun form
education
like starts
from grade one to higher Wrong verb form
starting
educations
,liabilities,like,grocery,electricity bill,mobile Fix the agreement mistake
education
bill
,gas Fix the agreement mistake
bills
and
etc.
Correct word choice
apply
To conclude
,in my point of view its
important to extend family Replace the word
it's
it is
mumbers
it Correct your spelling
members
hepls
in the future and in the present Correct your spelling
helps
days
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