The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 word

The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 word
The given pie charts display
recreational
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the recreational
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activities of European elders during the years
of
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apply
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1985 and 1995.
Overall
, in both periods of time, watching TV was the most preferrable activity among Europe citizens. Other aspects faced some special changes.
Moreover
, after a decade, people began playing computer pastimes a lot. As we can see, in 1985, adults used to watch TV a lot with
the
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a
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rate of 32%. Without
internet
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the internet
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being so popular as of right now,
general
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the general
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public communicated with their acquaintances a lot with
the
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a
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percentage of 21% and 18% for each
friends
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friend
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and family. 23% of them were amateurs
of
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at
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going out and
eat
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eating
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some food and others had a different activity.
However
, in 1995, grown-up Europeans still spent much time in front of
television
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the television
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but with a minor decrease of 2%. Surprisingly, brand new activity took second place with
the
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a
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rating of 27% being virtual games.
Also
, we can see that people started to talk to their mates more often with a rise of 5% but unfortunately they interacted with their parents much less with a whopping percentage of 7%.
Lastly
, they went for eating out less with a decline of 15% and 2% of them chose other deeds.
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