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The following two pie charts give the results of a survey into the popularity of different leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts give the results of a survey into the popularity of different leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts
illuminate
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show
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 the outcomes of different free
time
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 activities among European people in 1985 and 1995.
Overall
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, the pie charts compare the
leisure
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time
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 actions across different categories in
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Europe between the years 1985 and 1995. In 1985, the most popular activity was watching TV, accounting for 32% of
leisure
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time
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. Eating out was the second most popular at 23%, followed by talking with family at 18%. The "other" category made up 6% of
leisure
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 activities. By 1995, sitting in front of the television slightly decreased to 30%.
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, playing computer games appeared and became the second most popular activity at 27%. Not a single respondent to the survey rated playing computer games as their preferred
leisure
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 activity in 1985.
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 more popular in 1995 was talking with friends at 26% compared to 21% a decade earlier,
while
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 eating out significantly dropped to 8%. The
time
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 spent talking with family sharply declined to 7%, and the "other" category remained relatively stable at 2%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, leisure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie charts
  • Leisure activities
  • European adults
  • Survey results
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Ten-year period
  • Walking
  • Cycling
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Percentage
  • Popularity shift
  • Team sports
  • Solitary activities
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