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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barrett, I am writing in response to your advertisement which is about the help you need in your house for a few hours next summer. As you mentioned in the advertisement that you have very big front and back gardens, I can help you with maintaining them as I have
bachelor's
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 in botany. So, it will be easier for me to grow new plants of different varieties and take care of old ones. Every day, I will water the flowers, and grass and help them to grow faster by using the required nutrients for them as I have knowledge of gardening. I would like to do
this
 work because I am passionate about excellence in my career in botany as a botanist and
this
 would be a great option for me to enhance my interest and skills. I will be available three days of week from Friday to Sunday since on weekdays, I am going to pursue college for
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 degree. You can reach out to me either on my contact number which is 002020 or email me at [email protected]. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Denise
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coherence cohesion
Try to structure your sentences with more variety to enhance readability. For instance, varying sentence lengths and types can add a bit more sophistication to your writing.
coherence cohesion
Include more transitional phrases to ensure smooth progression of ideas throughout the letter.
task achievement
Make sure to check for tiny grammatical errors, such as missing articles or slight typos. These can sometimes detract from the overall impression.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear and logical structure with a good opening and closing.
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The tone of your writing is suitable for the purpose of the letter. It is polite and professional.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Domestic chores
  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
  • Time management
  • Prior commitments
  • Punctuality
  • Reliability
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