IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph illustrates the proportion of urban residents in four particular nations between 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
Linking Words
,
It is clear that
Linking Words
 the percentage of the population living in cities experienced an increasing trend in the
Philippines
Use synonyms
,
Malaysia
Use synonyms
,Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040.
In addition
Linking Words
,
Malaysia
Use synonyms
 has by far the largest proportion of urban dwellers over a period of 70 years. In 1970, the
rate
Fix the agreement mistake
rates
show examples
 in the
Philippines
Use synonyms
 and
Malaysia
Use synonyms
 were similar, at about 31% and 30%
separately
Replace the word
respectively
show examples
. By 1990, these two countries had witnessed a significant growth, with figures reaching
at
Remove the preposition
apply
show examples
50% .
However
Linking Words
, the percentage of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
residents in the
Philippines
Use synonyms
 living in cities decreased to around 40% in 2010,
while
Linking Words
 the counterpart continuously rose. It is predicted that in the
Philippines
Use synonyms
 and
Malaysia
Use synonyms
, the rate of urban residents will reach about 85% and 55% in 2040.
By contrast
Linking Words
, the figures for Thailand and Indonesia were lower than the other 2 nations in 1970, at around 18% and 15% respectively. In 2000, the figure for Indonesia overtook Thailand (55%).
Then
Linking Words
, the gap between the percentage of urban dwellers widened. It is projected that the rates will increase by roughly 30% and 20% in 2040.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: