The bar chart shows the results of the survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London thought of the city

The bar chart shows the results of the survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London thought of the city
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bar chart illustrates the result of a survey conducted over a
three
-year period to
to
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show the opinion of some people who live in London about the city.Well,there are a lot of noticeable things that can be observed.
Overall
,we can see that the range of shops has the highest
proportion
through the
years
. On the one hand,we can observe that nightlife, transport , museums and art galleries have nearly the same
proportion
throughout the
three
years
with a small difference between them.
Moreover
,museums ,art galleries and transport were at their best in year
three
and they both have approximately the same
proprotion
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proportion
proportions
.
On the other hand
,the range of shops has been
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the
three
years
with approximately 45% and it's the highest
proportion
over the
three
years
.
In addition
,job opportunities and a mixture of people have almost the same
proportion
through the
years
with nearly 35%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, years, three with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • results
  • conducted
  • three-year period
  • discover
  • thought
  • city
  • overall satisfaction
  • opinions
  • safety and security
  • transportation
  • perceptions
  • cleanliness
  • cultural and recreational activities
  • attitudes
  • cost of living
  • feedback
  • healthcare services
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