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The best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Environment is the place where each one can live either people, animals or plants. They stay comfortable and enjoyable. I disagree with
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 assumption, and the following essay will demonstrate
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some
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 to save the
environmental
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environment
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 clean.
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, it is reasonable
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putting
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 litter in
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 correct place. The
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for
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 instance,
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is
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responsibility
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this
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 issue. Especially the time of Eid. Many people throw dirty of animals.Parents are good
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 careful
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 their children.
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, the fact that build
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factories far
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 from homes. In order to avoid problems
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 as mental health
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 crowded roads. As a sample of Sohar
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. It is near the houses. Children born with different diseases.
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,
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 a few
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cars in each
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, to decrease the pollution. In most cases putting the trucks in a good place. In conclusion, I believe that not only putting bad things in cycle pins, companies make industrial materials but
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environmental problems.
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task achievement
To improve your task response score, ensure that your essay fully addresses the prompt with clear and comprehensive ideas. Consider discussing why increasing the price of fuel may or may not be effective and explore other methods in more detail.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, aim to structure your essay with clear and well-connected paragraphs. Use transitional words and phrases to help the reader follow your arguments more easily.
task achievement
Supporting your main points with relevant and specific examples will make your arguments stronger. Provide more detailed evidence and explanations to back up your views.
coherence cohesion
Revise your introduction to provide a clearer overview of your stance and the main points you will discuss. Ensure your conclusion effectively summarizes your arguments and reaffirms your position.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and reaffirms your position, which aids in understanding your overall argument.
task achievement
You touched on several important aspects of environmental issues, showing an understanding of the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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