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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this Write a letter to your manager. In your letter Explain why you want to take time off work Give details of the amount of time you need Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear
Sir
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Mme
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, I am
wiriting
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writing
this
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 letter to inform you
Sir
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Mme
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 that I need to take some time off
work
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. In my letter, I present
for
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to
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 you the reasons for my
demande
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demand
 and how my
work
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 could be covered
while
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 I am away.
Firstly
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,
Sir
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Mme
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, I want to take a little vacancy because I have some problem in my heart.
Consequently
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, the doctor
propose
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proposed
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 to me to take a break from
work
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 and to repose
in
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at
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 home.
Then
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, my demand is a suggestion from my doctor.
Secondly
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, I need to take
twoo
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two
week
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weeks
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 off
work
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. If it is possible, I want to start my vacancy
on
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apply
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this
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 weekend.
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, my vacancy will end
in
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on
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 September 20th.
On the other hand
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, in
this
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 period , I want to make clear
for
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 you
Sir
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Mme
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, that my
work
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 will be realised by my colleague in the team Mr Johan because he is my cousin and he will be able to take the important
work
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 in my home and I help him to achieve the
work
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.
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, I hope gratefully to accept ,
Sir
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/
Mme
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 , my request and help me to increase the safety of my heart. Yours faithfully Rabeb
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coherence cohesion
Try to avoid repetition and redundancy within the letter. Words such as 'Sir/Mme' don't need to be repeated as often; instead, using just 'Sir' or 'Madam' will suffice after the first instance.
task achievement
Be careful with spelling and grammatical errors. For instance, 'wiriting' should be 'writing', 'twoo' should be 'two', 'vacancy' should be 'vacation' or 'leave', and 'propose' should be 'suggested'. Improving accuracy will enhance the clarity of your letter.
task achievement
Consider describing how your colleague will manage your tasks in more detail for greater clarity. For example, mention specific responsibilities or how you will ensure a smooth transition of duties.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph expresses a single idea more clearly. This will help to make your letter more organized and easier to follow.
task achievement
The tone is polite and respectful, suitable for addressing a manager.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a logical structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which makes it easy to understand the writer's request.
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