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Some people think that it is best to live in a vertical city (meaning that people work and live in high buildings) while others think a horizontal city is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #city #work #buildings
As far as some
people
 believe it is better to spend their
life
 in
cities
 that are modern and there are a
lot
 of skyscrapers built on them others
people
 think living in
cities
 that are not modern and houses are more than buildings. I believe that horizontal
cities
 are best for living and experiencing a better
life
. Modern
cities
 are so noisy and busy. it means that
people
 living in these
cities
 have to be so fast in everything and try a
lot
 to achieve their goals and make a great lifestyle.
For example
, a family have to wake up early morning to arrive at their
work
 and their children`s school after that they have to make a meal that has to be made fast. They do not have enough
time
 to spend with each other and enjoy their
time
 with their family. So living in a modern city is not so good and
people
 just must
work
 fast. Living in
cities
 that are horizontal has a
lot
 of benefits. Having
work
 and home in
cities
 that are not so noisy and houses are bigger and more comfortable is so easier for
people
 and gives them
this
 opportunity to enjoy their
time
 with their friends and family so that they experience more relaxing
time
 being calm down.
For example
, all of
members
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the members
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 of a family
does
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do
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 not have to go to
work
 all the
time
 a father in a family can
work
 and because of that living in these
cities
 is cheaper is so easy to manage everything there is not a
lot
 of traffic jam and fast living so families can be more relaxed and live with peace of mind. In conclusion, living in old
cities
 that do not have a
lot
 of huge
building
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buildings
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 and
life
 is more simple in them is better for humans to experience a more beautiful
life
 which is the goal of everyone in the world.
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Introduction
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Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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