Your friend has a travel company and would like you to come and work with him. Write a letter replying to your friend's offer. In your letter: •explain what you know about your friend's company •choose whether you accept or decline the offer •give reasons for your choice

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Dear John, I hope you're doing well. I'm happy to hear that you want me to join your business. It is quite a huge faith between us.

Firstly

, I would like to know more about your company because it is opposite to my field of study. I have a limited source of information

such

as your empire famous by Travel Abroad youngsters, who want to pursue their career and life in another nation. The decision to join or decline can only be based on my capabilities

due to

a different field. But, I am eager to get extra knowledge about

this

stream as well and If I find myself capable of handling your business, I will definitely join.

Moreover

, if things will go positively, I would love to accept a manager position. The only issue is that I am unable to start work till November 2024. The reason behind

this

is my current job. I have two years of contract with them and it is going to be over in a couple of months. I will see you soon. Best wishes, Harpreet.

Submitted by harpreet291kaur on Wed Jul 24 2024

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coherence cohesion

Consider streamlining the logical flow by organizing paragraphs more clearly and ensuring each paragraph contains a single main idea.

task achievement

Expand on the explanation of your friend's company to show a deeper understanding and interest. This will strengthen the task response.

task achievement

The letter addresses all parts of the task, including a response to the job offer, an explanation of your knowledge about the company, and reasons for the decision.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is appropriate and maintains a professional yet friendly demeanor, which suits the context of writing to a friend about a job offer.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are well done, contributing to the overall cohesiveness of the letter.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

182 words

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