Your employer is considering ways to adjust work hours and reduce them overall. You have been asked to provide suggestions on how to implement this change. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter •Explain why you think reducing work hours is a good idea. •Suggest how the work hours could be reduced. •Describe how these changes could benefit the company.
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Dear Mr. Peter,
I'm writing
this
to provide a suggestion on declining work
hours. You are asking that.
The proposed shift, 9 am to 5 pm, with a single Sunday holiday, would allow our employees to focus on their personal lives, leading to a healthier work
-life balance and increased productivity.
To my knowledge, the last
hour of work
is not that critical because our clients prefer to meet in the morning. Even all the essential project work
is completed before 5 pm. So, staff usually spend the last
60 minutes on personal chores such
as chatting, paying bills, etc.
Shifts should be 9 am to 5 pm, and Sunday should be the only holiday. Saturday shifts of 9 to 3 would cover those compensatory hours. This
would allow workers to work
enthusiastically, eventually increasing the company's overall
productivity.
I hope you will consider this
proposal and look forward to discussing it further
.
Yours faithfully,
John SmitSubmitted by pateldhruvi038 on
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Consider clarifying the reasoning behind the proposed time shift in a more detailed manner, and ensure each paragraph focuses on one primary idea.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow by creating smoother transitions between ideas. This will make your argument more persuasive.
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The letter addresses the key points required by the task, including reasoning, suggestions, and expected benefits.
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The tone is polite and professional, suited for a letter to an employer.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-executed, maintaining a formal structure.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite