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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animals.Is it justified or there any alternative.

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 some individuals, it is illegal to perform experiments on wild creatures.
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, others
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 that they are the best source for attestation and their help can make many significant discoveries. I think it is beneficial to apply modern science to these species. Because human life is more important and new drugs can be judged easily.
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 with, humans are considered the best creatures on the earth they play vital roles we can not harm them by performing experiments on them.
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, many cosmetics are being made and tested on human some of them are allergic and it can easily damage their skin
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 if the same thing applies to
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 they survive because they can sustain themselves
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. Since the 1960s, they have found numerous inspiring biological facts by conducting their experiments on rats.
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 famous experiment of cloning was done on a sheep named Dolly which is best proven for tube babies.
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, some experimentation on
animals
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 should be permitted, but I still believe there are some alternatives. In recent times, artificial intelligence has been applied in almost every field. If we can set all the parameters, AI may calculate the possible effects and give us a reliable result. Though
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 technology is still in the experimental stage, I am optimistic about it because it has grown fast since it emerged. Conducting research using AI-based methods can be a brand-new solution. In conclusion, for some people, testing drugs on
animals
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 is entirely justified and appropriate because human lives are more important than
animals
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. I
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 believe that alternative methods need to be enhanced and developed to save the lives of
animals
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 as well.

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task achievement
Ensure clarity and accuracy in your statements, particularly in the introduction. For example, change 'it is illegal to perform experiments on wild creatures' to 'some argue that experimentation on animals should be outlawed.'
coherence cohesion
Improve logical connections between ideas to enhance the flow of the essay. For instance, explain the link between the benefits of using animals in experiments and their significant contributions such as the discovery made with Dolly the sheep.
task achievement
Expand on alternative methods more comprehensively to provide a balanced argument. For example, further explain how AI could potentially replace animal testing and what stages are involved in its development.
conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and presents a balanced view, acknowledging both sides of the argument.
supported main points
The essay includes relevant examples, such as the mention of Dolly the sheep, to support your arguments.

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