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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. The area that produced the most is Greater China with 26% followed closely by Europe with 25%, which when both combined takes more than half of the total chart. The least number of making is by Africa with a measly 2%, South
America
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's at 4% twice the amount of Africa, the third and fourth regions which are South Asia and Japan has an exponentially bigger margin, with 8% and 16% respectively.
However
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, the difference between North
America
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 and Japan is not very significant with only a 3% difference. Japan and Korea have similar amounts of production,
in contrast
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 to South
America
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 and North
America
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 with a difference of 21%.
Overall
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, we can observe that China has created the most passenger vehicles slightly beating Europe by 1%, with South
America
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, Africa, and South Asia being the 3 areas with the least production.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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