The table presents the information about the sales figures of books, novels and magazines in one local bookstore in the UK for January 2010.
The table presents
the
information about the Correct article usage
apply
sales
figures of books
, novels
and magazines
in one local bookstore in the UK for January 2010.
According to
the sales
figure of non-members, comprising sales
to books
, novels
and magazines
, adults brought
Correct your spelling
bought
magazines
more than other
any other groups of customers which accounted for 1250 Correct word choice
apply
magazines
, following
by students with 330 Wrong verb form
followed
magazines
. Although
44 books
were sold to students more than adults with 30 books
. However
, no book was sold to seniors, they purchased 124 novels
and 80 magazines
.
In addition
, Bookshop members bought more books
and novels
than non-members customer
, accounting for 70 and 942, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
customers
On the other hand
, 39 magazines
were sold to bookshop members, which were
fewer than any Correct subject-verb agreement
was
types
of Fix the agreement mistake
type
the
customers.
In conclusion, the total number of publications sold in January 2010 was 3134. On Correct article usage
apply
this
figure, 144 items were books
and 1291 items were novels
. Therefore
, magazines
accounted for the greatest number of sales
at
1699.Change preposition
in
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, books, novels, magazines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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