The two pie charts illustrate the online shopping sales for retail sections in Canada in 2005 compared to the rates in 2010.
The two pie charts illustrate the online shopping sales for retail sections in Canada in 2005 compared to the rates in 2010.
It is apparently seen that food & beverage and video games have experienced a
raise
Correct your spelling
rise
by
contrast to electronics & appliances and home furnishings.
Change preposition
in
For example
, video
games section got a mere 5 per Correct article usage
the video
cent
increase ,meanwhile
home furnishings got through an adverse trend by dropping ten per Add a comma
meanwhile,
cent
off. The numbers were 23% and fifteen per cent
respectively.
Moreover
, food supplies'
sales Change noun form
supplies
rised
slightly Correct your spelling
rose
raised
rise
for
up to ten per Change preposition
by
cent
in five years whilist
Correct your spelling
while
electronic
& appliances shows an adverse trend and Replace the word
electronics
declines
five per Wrong verb form
declined
cent
of the retail's
sales rate. It is worth noticing that despite the changes none of the above has had a considerate Change noun form
retail
raise
or decline.Correct your spelling
rise
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