The two pie charts illustrate the online shopping sales for retail sections in Canada in 2005 compared to the rates in 2010.

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The two pie charts illustrate the online shopping sales for retail sections in Canada in 2005 compared to the rates in 2010. It is apparently seen that food & beverage and video games have experienced a

raise

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rise

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contrast to electronics & appliances and home furnishings.

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video

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the video

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games section got a mere 5 per

cent

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increase ,

meanwhile

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meanwhile,

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home furnishings got through an adverse trend by dropping ten per

cent

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off. The numbers were 23% and fifteen per

cent

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respectively.

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, food

supplies'

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supplies

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sales

rised

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rose

raised

rise

slightly

for

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up to ten per

cent

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in five years

whilist

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while

electronic

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electronics

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& appliances shows an adverse trend and

declines

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declined

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five per

cent

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of the

retail's

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retail

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sales rate. It is worth noticing that despite the changes none of the above has had a considerate

raise

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rise

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or decline.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

133 words

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