The two pie charts illustrate the online shopping sales for retail sections in Canada in 2005 compared to the rates in 2010.

The two pie charts illustrate the online shopping sales for retail sections in Canada in 2005 compared to the rates in 2010. It is apparently seen that food & beverage and video games have experienced a

raise

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rise

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by

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in

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contrast to electronics & appliances and home furnishings.

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,

video

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the video

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games section got a mere 5 per

cent

increase ,

meanwhile

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home furnishings got through an adverse trend by dropping ten per

cent

off. The numbers were 23% and fifteen per

cent

respectively.

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, food

supplies'

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supplies

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sales

rised

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rose

raised

rise

slightly

for

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by

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up to ten per

cent

in five years

whilist

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while

electronic

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electronics

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& appliances shows an adverse trend and

declines

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declined

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five per

cent

of the

retail's

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retail

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sales rate. It is worth noticing that despite the changes none of the above has had a considerate

raise

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rise

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or decline.