The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart given showed the participation

number

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of adults in

thousands

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in two years: 1997 and 2017 from various major sports in an area. It can be seen that Tennis has

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the

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highest percentage both in 1997 and 2017

while

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Basketball showed the lowest percentage. Tennis has shown a 50

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thousands

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thousand

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number

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participant

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participants

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in 1997 and its

number

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rose in 2017 to 55

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thousands

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thousand

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. Following the data

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for

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Tennis, there is Football and Rugby

that

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apply

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shown

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show

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almost similar

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number

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numbers

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While

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Footbal

has

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had

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around 30

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thousands

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thousand

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in 1997, Rubgy

also

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shown

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showed

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more than 30

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thousands

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thousand

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, approximately 32

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thousands

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thousand

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in that year. Meanwhile, in 2017 Football

shown

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was shot

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to 48

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thousands

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thousand

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and Rugby almost reached 50

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thousands

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thousand

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which was 49. Some major sports

also

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have similar patterns

are

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such as

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Swimming and Golf. Swimming

shown

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showed

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the same

number

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both in 1997 and 2017

while

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Golf has minor differentiation, in 1997 reached 30

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thousands

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thousand

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and in 2017 32

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thousands

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thousand

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. The other sport is Cricket,

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which

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has shown

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shown

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showed

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decline

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a decline

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during

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between

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20 years which was 1997 and 2017. In 1997 the

number

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of Cricket

participant

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participants

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shown

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was

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thousands

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thousand

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and declined to below 10

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thousands

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thousand

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in 2017.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, thousands with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

188 words

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participation rate
increase/decrease in numbers
trend
decade
relatively stable
major sports
potential reasons
contributing factors
public interest
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*Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences.* Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.