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Band 5

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that
computers
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 are the most effective
invention
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 in the
last
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years
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few years
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.
This
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 essay totally agrees with
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 statement because using
computers
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 helps to
reduces
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paper
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 waste, and it is a useful
gadgets
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 for learning.
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, the
paper
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 waste decreases after using
computers
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.
People
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use
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computer's
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computer
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application
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applications
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such
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 as Word for writing,and they can save their
works
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work
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 easily. For
that
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that,
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 they prefer
useing eletronic
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using electronic
 devices
instead
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 of physical
papers
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paper
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.
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, the reduction of
paper
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 used
is
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protects our
environemt
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environment
, because
people
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 will not cut out trees to produce
paper
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.
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, I used to
study
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 by using many papers and I through it, but now I like to
use
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 my
computer
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 for studying. Another point to consider is working on
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computer
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a computer
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more
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is more
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 convenient. Individuals can
study
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 from home by using their
computers
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, and
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 many employees
work
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 on their
elctronic
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electronic
 devices from their
home
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homes
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.
This
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invention
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 makes our lives easier
,
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apply
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 because we can
work
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 whenever and anywhere without any problem.
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, in COVID-19 many countries did not allow
people
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 to
going
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 out, so many education
instituates
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institutes
 started distance learning by using
computers
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,
also
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 companies
use
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 the same method .
This
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 helps
people
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 to
study
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 and
work
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 without any barriers. In conclusion,
electronic
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an electronic
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invention
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inventions
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such
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 as
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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is
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are
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imporatnt
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important
 in our lives and environment. Because using
computers
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 decreases the amount of
papers
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paper
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waste
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wasted
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, and
help
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helps
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people
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 to
study
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 and
work
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 whenever and
any where
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anywhere
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. It is predicted that
this
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invention
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 will
be
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apply
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develop more and
people
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 will
use
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 it
on
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in
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 everything.

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clear comprehensive ideas
To improve clarity and comprehension, avoid repetitive phrases. For instance, instead of saying 'use my computer for studying,' try variations like 'utilize digital tools for my studies.'
relevant specific examples
Ensure all examples are directly relevant and clearly connected to the main points. Sometimes, examples can feel forced – strive to make them naturally fit into the argument.
supported main points
Provide more comprehensive explanations to support your main points. For instance, elaborate on how computers directly reduce paper waste further with more in-depth analysis.
introduction conclusion present
Good structure with a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a sense of completeness to the essay.
complete response
The essay responds well to the task, addressing multiple aspects of the importance of computers.
logical structure
Logical flow is maintained throughout, making the essay easier to follow for the reader.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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