The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The line graph displays how the number changed between the closed
shops
and the
new
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opened
shops
in one particular country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, these two types of
shop
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shops
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decreased eventually in 2018 compared to 2011.
Additionally
, most notably, the closed
shops
can see
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a huge drop between 2014 and 2015 and
it
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they
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recovered rapidly to over 5,000. In 2011, there were nearly 8,500 new opened
shops
in the market,
while
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which
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it
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apply
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was much higher than the closures.
However
, the number fell to around 4000 in 2012. Even though the openings increased gradually in the next two years, they had never exceeded 5,500
unites
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units
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in one year by 2018.
By contrast
, the closures were at around 6500.
Then
, it experienced some fluctuations in the next three years, but it was still around
at
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6,500 units in 2014.
However
, the number dropped rapidly between 2014 to 2015, to lower than 1000 units. After that, they recovered to slightly over 5000 in 2016 and had remained
this
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in this
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trend by 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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