The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

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The line graph displays how the number changed between the closed

shops

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and the

new

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newly

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opened

shops

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in one particular country from 2011 to 2018.

Overall

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, these two types of

shop

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shops

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decreased eventually in 2018 compared to 2011.

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, most notably, the closed

shops

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can see

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a huge drop between 2014 and 2015 and

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recovered rapidly to over 5,000. In 2011, there were nearly 8,500 new opened

shops

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in the market,

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while

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was much higher than the closures.

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, the number fell to around 4000 in 2012. Even though the openings increased gradually in the next two years, they had never exceeded 5,500

unites

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in one year by 2018.

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, the closures were at around 6500.

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, it experienced some fluctuations in the next three years, but it was still around

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6,500 units in 2014.

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, the number dropped rapidly between 2014 to 2015, to lower than 1000 units. After that, they recovered to slightly over 5000 in 2016 and had remained

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this

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in this

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trend by 2018.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

170 words

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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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Many people realize that people living in the 21st century generally have a better quality of lives than people born in earlier centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of health facilities.Others,However,say that this woud have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.