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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of global passenger
car
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production
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 by region in 2015. The data is divided into seven
regions
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, with notable differences in their contributions to worldwide
car
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 manufacturing. Greater China led with the largest share, producing 26% of the total passenger cars. Europe followed closely with 25%, meaning these two
regions
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 together accounted for more than half of the world’s
car
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production
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.
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 highlights a high concentration of manufacturing in these
regions
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. North America ranked
third,
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contributing 19% of the global output,
while
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 Japan and Korea produced 16%.
Although
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 these
regions
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 are key players, their shares are smaller compared to Greater China and Europe, indicating that
car
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production
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 is somewhat concentrated in specific areas. In conclusion, passenger
car
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production
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 in 2015 was dominated by Greater China, Europe, and North America, which collectively produced around 70% of the world’s cars. Other
regions
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,
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 as South Asia, South America, and the Middle East/Africa, had relatively minor contributions.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, production, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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