A friend who is planning to visit you has asked you to describe the most interesting and enjoyable things to do in the community where you currently live. Write an email to your friend, tell about these things. In your email: •Say what these things are •Say why they are interesting/enjoyable •Suggest what you can do together

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Dear Sam, I hope you are doing well and are in good spirits. I am really glad to know that you are planning to
visit
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me. I will assure you that you will never forget
this
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remarkable journey in your entire life. If I talk about interesting and enjoyable things in our community
then
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you will
unable
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to control yourself. There are plenty of
places
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where
number
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a number
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of sightseers love to
visit
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such
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as parks,
museum
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museums
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, beaches, shopping
mall
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malls
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and
the
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historical
places
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etcetera. I
am thinking
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we will
visit
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all
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places
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the places
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. As you are a travel freak person and love to explore things deeply. People can enjoy multifarious brands just under one roof in malls. So, in
shopping
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a shopping
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mall, we will
visit
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Ardene,Guess and Aldo stores and
also
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taste the fast food as well. In parks and beaches, we can breathe in
a
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fresh air and enjoy the natural and scenic environment over there. Even on
beach
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the beach
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, we can enjoy paragliding and scuba diving. Visiting historical
places
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and museums will provide an immense of
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knowledge
about the sacrifice of
freedom-fighters
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freedom fighters
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.
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, there will be a guided tour
who
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that
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will tell us more about these
places
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. we will
do
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have
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a lot of fun together and will click numerous photos to recall our memories. I am eagerly waiting to
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you soon! Warm Regards, Jazz.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure all sentences are complete and clearly expressed to improve coherence. Consider revising sentences that may sound awkward or incomplete.
Task Response
Revise certain expressions for grammatical accuracy. For example, phrases like "unable to control yourself" can be improved for clarity and appropriateness.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter opens with a warm greeting and ends with a friendly closing, which is effective for maintaining rapport.
Task Achievement
A wide range of interesting and enjoyable activities in the community are described, making it an informative letter.
Task Achievement
The suggestions for what to do together are clear, making it easy for the friend to visualize the visit.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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