Public transport helps save money and curbs pollution over private transport. What do you prefer and why?

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Public

transport

helps save money and curbs pollution over private

transport

. What do you prefer and why? There are some people

believe

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who believe

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that prefer to get public

transport

. Another group of people think that using

own

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their own

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transport

is more

favorable

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favourable

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. Each of them has special benefits and advantages. I strongly believe that getting public

transport

is helpful to save money and curbs pollution.

On the other hand

while

using a bus or taxi you don’t waste time. The traffic jam is really bad and in

this

way

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way,

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you can get

your

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to your

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address in time.

In addition

, private cars can

be caused

Wrong verb form

cause

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to create

Verb problem

apply

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traffic

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a traffic

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jam

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jams

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, in

this

way

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way,

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you can avoid

to wait

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waiting

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for hours on the way.

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Introduction and Conclusion

Your essay could benefit from a clearer introduction and conclusion. Start with a general statement about the topic, then state your thesis. Conclude by summarizing your main points and restating your opinion.

Supporting Arguments

You have mentioned some important points, but it would be better to elaborate more on how public transport helps save money and reduces pollution. Providing specific examples and evidence can strengthen your argument.

Grammar and Sentence Structure

Pay attention to grammatical errors and sentence structure. For instance, 'There are some people believe that prefer to get public transport' can be revised to 'Some people believe that using public transport is preferable.'

Coherence and Transition

Try to avoid repetitive phrases and make sure your essay flows smoothly from one idea to the next. Use proper transition words and phrases to link your ideas cohesively.

Clear Position Statement

You have clearly stated your preference for public transport and provided a couple of reasons to support your viewpoint.

Relevance of Ideas

The ideas presented in your essay are relevant to the topic. You have touched on the benefits of public transport in terms of saving money and reducing pollution, as well as addressing issues like traffic jams.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

117 words

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Public transport helps save money and curbs pollution over private transport. What do you prefer and why?

Include an introduction and conclusion

At present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of old people.

Some believe that students should learn a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. discuss bothe sides and give your opinion.

In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?