In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do thier shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Shopping is an essential part of our life. Large Shopping malls have been opened at a wide range
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resulted
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in
closure
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the closure
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of some local
shops
.
This
action resulted in attracting a vast number of people towards the malls. In my
opinion
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I think
this
is
the
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a
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positive
improvemnt
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improvement
improvements
for all the customers. On the positive side, there are more benefits available for the buyer
as well as
seller
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the seller
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. The most obvious benefit is
, Customers
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that customers
will have a diverse option to explore all
the
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needs. At the same time, the
availablity
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availability
of the products in
a marketplaces
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marketplaces
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are huge
comparing
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compared
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to the smaller
shops
.
For instance
, if a person wants to buy garments, electronics, and food products, they will have various options to choose from the best. The third point in favour
, The avalability
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is the availability
of goods and services will be top in quality and
looks
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look
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attractive, which is
also
affordable and get benefits out of it. On the negative side, after the development of large
business
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businesses
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small
shops
are
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were
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closed
due to
decrease
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a decrease
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of
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in
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customers
that
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which
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resulted in a huge loss for local vendors which forced them to
finally
close the shop.
Moreover
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there is a huge problem
for
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with
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the car parking when we visit
road side
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roadside
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shops
which
was
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is
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too difficult for us to load and unload the products. But the plazas have more car parking space. In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
ther
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there
they
are minor disadvantages like lack of space for parking. They do have more advantages like opening an opportunity for adults to become
an
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budding
enterprenuer
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entrepreneurs
entrepreneur
and
allows
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them to window shopping and
gives
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giving
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thema
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them
various
choises
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choices
.
Therefore
, I think
this
is
positive
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a positive
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development for
the
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society and for
a
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shoppins
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shopping
centers
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centres
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.
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  • economies of scale
  • local economy
  • unique local products
  • sense of community
  • local culture and identity
  • job opportunities
  • environmental footprint
  • time-efficient
  • social hubs
  • convenient
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