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The graph below shows the usage of oil in four different countries between 1966 and 2006 as a percentage of total energuy use within each nation.

The graph below shows the usage of oil in four different countries between 1966 and 2006 as a percentage of total energuy use within each nation.
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The diagram illustrates the
oil
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 consumption from 1966 to 2006 in four areas of the world.
Overall
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,
Turkey
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 is the only country where their
oil
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usage
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 has increased compared to the other countries that showed a huge decrease in the number, except for Italy which represents a slight decline.
First,
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Turkey
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 is taking the lead in
oil
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usage
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 as the percentage developed from 60% to 90%, making it the highest country among the four in
oil
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usage
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.
Secondly
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, despite that their consumption decreased in 2006, Italy still, they are less than
Turkey
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 by about 5%.
On the other hand
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, Sweden and Iceland showed a huge change as their
usage
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were
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 before 80% and 70%, respectively, and after that, it took a steep down throughout the years reaching 35% and 20%, respectively, in 2006.
To sum up
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,
although
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 three out of four countries reduced their
oil
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usage
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 in 2006 in comparison to 1966,
Turkey
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 was the only one
that their
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whose
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 demand for
oil
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 elevated in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, turkey, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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