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Some people believe that children should learn to paint or draw as a subject in their school curriculum. Others think that it is a waste of time and that there are more important subjects that should be taught. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #paint #school #curriculum #waste #time #subjects
Some see that children should have the ability to choose the subject that interests them, but there are
people
 who disagree with them and they see that they should just study the basic required subjects,
this
 essay will agree with the first opinion because
people
 are when they studying the something that matters them. It is helpful for the future of humans if
people
 care about their work and that will happen only if they see it as something interesting,
for example
, research at HARVARD University shows that the most successful in the world are those who have interstate in their job, and it is significant how the person can achieve if he loves the work that he does. On the other, the group that agrees with teaching them the basics, the reason behind
this
 is children will able to deal with different and a lot of subjects and
finally
 the person will choose what he is good at,
for instance
, in my country the system like that and actually it is not bad at all.
However
 ، it is very important to do something you like and not waste your time on matters that you don't care about, in my childhood the children around me weren't focused on what the teacher said and they were feeling bored and after the lesson the forgot the subject, that must not happen anymore in the future and it is supposed to change it and make
people
 focus about what they feel fun in, I would like to live to do what I love
this
 will make me happy.
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Ensure your essay directly addresses all parts of the prompt. The essay should discuss both views in more detail before providing your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and transitions smoothly to the next.
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Provide more specific examples and expand your arguments. This adds depth and clarity.
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Your essay does present a clear opinion and attempts to discuss both sides.
coherence cohesion
There is a conclusion present, which ties your arguments together.
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Your use of examples, such as the research at Harvard University, supports your arguments, even though they could be more specific.

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