task1 the graph below gives iformation on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

task1

the graph below gives iformation on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
The line graph provides key information about the figures of
people
who take
a
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part
for
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some activities (
film
club
-martial arts -amateur dramatics -table tennis -musical performances) at a social centre in Australia specifically in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020. First of all, there were
not
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no
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people
who joined musical performances in 2000 and 2005. In 2010 the number of participants increased to 10
people
.
Secondly
, table tennis and amateur dramatics in 2000 were almost 15 and 25, respectively. It is
also
important to highlight that, both table tennis and amateur dramatics were the same number of
people
who joined the
club
in 2010, at 20
people
.
However
, martial arts in 2000 was around 35
people
.
In addition
, martial arts peaked in 2010.
Moreover
,
film
club
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clubs
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almost the trend steady
in
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over the 20 years.
Furthermore
,
film
club
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clubs
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decreased in 2010
than
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then
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jumped in 2020.
To sum up
, we could say that, the
film
club
was the most activity
people
enjoyed comparison with musical performances.
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