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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course -say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Respected sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to give my feedback on the course I
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 with your institute to enhance my cooking skills. My
overall
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 experience
while
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 doing the program was very good because the staff conducted the course very well. All the members of the faculty were helpful and polite in their approach towards participants. I am glad to tell you that after finishing my classes with the school. I feel more confident in displaying my cooking skills and I have become more enthusiastic
in
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 trying new dishes, especially
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continental
food
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, which, I had found very difficult to cook before attending the cookery classes.
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,
lately
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 I am planning to open a
food
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 joint that would help me to grow even
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. In the end, I would like to
request
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 you that
i
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 have noticed that your school did not offer any course in
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Chinese
food
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 and ever since I had left your cooking school I wanted to write
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you
on
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this
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. It would be great if you
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 manage to start that as well because
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Chinese
food
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 is widely popular among
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children. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Maninder.

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coherence cohesion
Try to break down your information into more distinct paragraphs to improve clarity. For example, you could create separate paragraphs for your enjoyment of the course, your cooking experiences since the course, and your suggestion for a new course.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread your text for minor grammatical errors and typos, as these can detract from an otherwise excellent letter. For instance, 'I' should always be capitalized, and phrases like 'moreover, lately' should be revised for clarity.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is very polite and appreciative, making it suitable for formal communication.
coherence cohesion
The letter has an introduction, body, and conclusion, which provides a logical and structured format.
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