The chart below shows the number of different types of vehicles registered in European use from 1996 to 2006.

The chart below shows the number of different types of vehicles registered in European use from 1996 to 2006.
The picture illustrates the information about the amount of transportation users in
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Europe
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between 1996 and 2006.
Overall
, there were particularly 5 sections, which had their number each.
Therefore
, the highest number of users was private cars,
by contrast
, public
transports
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transport
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claimed the smallest amounts and
also
the unchanged status. Meanwhile, the first-rate fluctuation belonged to trucks.
As well as
can be seen from the chart, the first vehicle which achieved the highest number of registers in both 1996 and 2006,
consequently
,
which
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claimed that 26% of changes, from approximately 20 to 25
millions
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.
In addition
, by having a similar trend,
while
trucks had nearly 2
millions
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registers in 1996, the remaining achieved a tiny margin rather than the previous.
Besides
, in 2006, four-wheel vehicles
have been
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dramatically
enhanced
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1,5 higher from 1996, about 50%, which had the best fluctuation.
Finally
, others manufactured about 33% from both years,
consequently
, which increased 1
tons
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of registers in 2006.
Additionally
,
on the contrary
, 3 remaining parts have shown the opposite trend.
Therefore
,
started
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at 4 tons of subscribers in 1996, motorbikes have declined
around
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33% in users.
Furthermore
, the only transportation had the unchanged status, which belonged to public
transports
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transport
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,
consequently
, which remained at
the
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similar rate, about 1000
thousands
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in 2 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "consequently, therefore".
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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