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Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives, compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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From past to present, there are many enormous corporations that always have policies that give an amount of money for humans to exist in a high position in an enterprise after each month.From my perspective, I believe that
this
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 advantages far outweigh the drawbacks and
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. On the one hand, there are many pros for paying higher salaries to directors and managers than other employees.
To begin
 with,
this
 improves motivation for all workers in problems from whole activities to jobs
such
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according to
 a survey, if agents
own
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 a
tall
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higher
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 level wage, necessary they are more hardworking,
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 and add that
this
also
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 many talented
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 from anywhere, even other state.
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, there are CEOs and executives permanent must withstand pressure,
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 responsible and waste effort,
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.
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 afterwards loss
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 depression which
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 “If you want to sit in a position where no one else can sit,you must endure the feeling that no one else can’’.
On the other hand
, there are numerous cons
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wage
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not
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pay
 between all military ranks. To start with,
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equally
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 and employees are able to feel unfair like some cases
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 a lawsuit.
Moreover
,
this
 is more serious with step-by-step increasing discrimination
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 in society
such
 as the life of directors more completely than others or agencies who
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 not enough to live on
salary
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. In conclusion, the benefits of issues which pay a high amount of money for managers are more respected and
this
 policy remains stable from contemporary today.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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